Showing posts with label New. revised. Show all posts
Showing posts with label New. revised. Show all posts

Thursday, February 5, 2015

SRU: Joseph the rewrite

Before we get to this week's "Classic Tale" I have an announcement. I have just finished the school version of my first TG story in a decade. I plan to add to it (as I had to keep it 1000ish words) to make it flow better and become my vision that I saw. Also I want to wait a few weeks before releasing it as it is school work. For these two reasons I will be releasing this story the last Thursday of this month. So mark your calenders, I will be ending the weekly posts with an original story. After that, I will post them whenever I have new ones ready! I am thinking of posting non TG stories or works that I am doing for my college course (creative writing) to keep the weekly updates going (as sadly most of my old works are lost as I was homeless in 2001-2006, so many stories were lost) but not sure if you would be interested.
 On to the story:
This was the rewrite I did for SRU: Joseph in the 90's!




SRU:Joseph(the rewrite)

It was raining cats and dogs literally outside the mall. The old man in charge of Spells R Us was shaking his head. "I guess Jake wished it would rain cats and dogs, and that dumb genie must have thought he meant it litterally." The old man walked into the back of the store and started to get ready for Halloween. You see HALLOWEEN was only a few weeks away & it was his busiest time of the year.

On the other side of the mall, Joseph Laser was walking from store to store. He was just trying to cheer himself up. He was so depressed over the death of his mother only a few months back, that he just didn't know what to do anymore. He had scared away most of his friends and now was basically alone. Dave, his only freind left had said recently that the depression had begun to eat Joseph away and if he didn't get help soon, then he would likely die from the pain. The scary part of this was the fact that Joseph was very close to commiting suicide. He just didn't know what he could do anymore. He just wished he was like his sister. She was dealing with this a lot better than he was. She was depressed but somehow she was able to keep going. Joseph looked at a store in a hole in the wall area of the mall. He read the sign "SPELLS R US".

"Spells R Us?" he thought. "Oh well it couldn't do any harm to look." He entered the store and heard the tiny door charm ring. The stopre had all kinds of lamps,rings,costumes, & other odd items. The smell was of old ancient books and there were a few spider webs in the corner of the store. Joseph started to think tthe store was abandoned until a old man wearing what looked like a bath robe walked out from the back room.

"Hello Joseph, I was sorry to hear about the death of your mother a while back. But you really need to let your friends help you. You see friends are the most important thing you need in a time like this." The old man kept looking at Joseph. "And do you really think suicide is the best answer?" Joseph was shocked by how the old man knew all about him. "How did you know my name and what makes you think I am thinking about suicide?"

"Well you see my friend, I am a wizard. I know many things. For instance, your sister is taking this better than you are and you wish you were more like her. Anyway if you truly want to be like your sister then I can arrange that. All you have to do is take this pill." The old man said as he took out a pill. "Take this pill tonight and in the morning you will be just like your sister. " Joseph looked at him oddly. "Oh don't worry its not poison and before you ask it is free." Joseph took the pill from the old man. "Good bye Joseph and please come again."

"Whatever." Joseph said as he left the store. He thought the old man was nuts, but then he thought if the pill killed him it wouldn't matter he decided he would commit suicide anyways. "I guess i'll try this pill out tonight."

After dinner Joseph went straight to his bed room and swallowed the pill. Suddenly he felt very sleepy and fell to the bed. Hours later Joseph awok as the sun beamed onto his face. He brushed the long red hair out of his face. "Wait a minute long red hair? Since when did I have long hair. Even better since when have I had red hair?" Joseph thought to himself. He got up and went straight to the mirror. Long eyelshes, a average set of breasts,long red hair. He even was now 5'3 instead of being his old 6'. She couldn't believe it. Joseph realized why his sister deal with it, because it felt like his mother was in her. Thats when Joseph realized she had always been a part of him, it just took this transformation to bring it out. With that she got up & went straight to the bathroom.

A few hours later at the mall. The old man heard aring from his door charm and went out to greet the person. There at the doorway stood a red head wearing a pink dress, and 3 inch heels. "Hello Jospeh. Are you upset with me?"

"No. Actually I realized that my mom was always with me. Just my hatred of my old body and the depression of her death hid that." She started to walk out and then turned around. "By the way it's Julie now." With that she left. The old man smiled and went back to getting ready for his big day.

Thursday, January 8, 2015

SRU : Jake

 This continues my archive of my classic stories, this story took place between SRU: Joseph and SRU: Dave! Posted originally in the 90's!

Unlike my other Classics, I did a rewrite and added information, this section that was rewritten and is all new, never been posted before anywhere is in ORANGE! I hope you enjoy.



SRU: Jake 

 Jake was the kind of a guy you would never want to be. He was 16, only 160lbs., & only 5'4. In other words he was a wimp. The kids at school were so mean that they never talked to him & when they did they said mean things to him. Jake was so lonely. Then one day he came upon a shop in a hole in the wall section of the mall called Spells R Us. Jake decided to enter the store. The tiny door charm made a quiet ring sound, not as annoying as those other kinds that most small shops have that drive you crazy. As he looked around he saw many old & odd items like lamps, rings, old books, & even Halloween costumes. 
 As Jake looked round the store he noticed a old man coming out from the back. He was shocked when he saw that the old man was wearing what appeared to be a bathrobe. Jake blinked but it was true the man was really wearing it,it wasn't his eyes. "Hello Jake." The old man said as he looked at the kid."Before you ask I know your name because I am a wizard." 
 Jake looked at him oddly. He didn't believe this man could actually be a wizard. Jake looked at the old man's counter. There was a old lamp. The old man noticed that Jake was curious & spoke. "That is a magic lamp as in genies." He said with a big grin. 
 "Yeah right." Jake said. 
 "Look I'll give you the lamp for free, then you will discover that it is for real." Jake looked at the old man with a confused look. "Look Halloween is coming up in a few weeks, I make my business then. I can afford to give you a magic lamp for free its no big deal." Jake couldn't argue with that. He took the lamp & left the small shop. The old man smiled & was about to go back into the back when a lady came in with her son. "How may I help you?"
 "My son has been doing things that are unsatisfactory like touching women in certain areas, & looking up their dresses! I was hoping you knew away to teach him a lesson because I sure don't." Her son was struggling as she kept a grip on his hand. 
"Yes I do." The old man said with a small smile. "It depends on what you want. Do you want him as an animal, a object, or a woman?" The wizard could tell that the woman was tired of how her son had been acting so he wasn't to surprised when she said she wanted her 16 yr old son as her 16 yr old daughter. A few minutes later the lady left the store with a cute 16 yr old blonde wearing a pink dress.
  The old man thought about Jake & his lamp & then went back to the back room. Jake arrived at home and went straight to his bedroom. He turned on the lights & rubbed the lamp hoping it wasn't a trick. Suddenly smoke came from the lamp. It began to form into a figure. It was a genie. A ugly male genie. He also looked like he was dumb. "Hello master, you have 3 wishes." Said the dumb genie.
 "Ok. Lets see I don't feel like going to the baseball game today so I wish it would rain Cats and Dogs."
 "As you wish master, though it is a odd request."
 Jake ran to the window & couldn't believe what he saw, he turned to the genie. "Oh man I didn't mean that literally. I better be careful how I phrase my wishes." Jake sat down on his bed. He sighed. "I wish I was handsome so all the woman in the world would love me." Suddenly he felt his muscles grow, He grew another 3 inches & his hair became blonde. He looked in the mirror & smiled. After thinking a little more he then decided to go outside. He saw a lot of women. They all liked him, but not one would go on a date with him. "Women." He thought. "I wish I understood them." Before he could realize his mistake he could feel himself shrinking back to his old height & his blonde hair growing. Suddenly a huge weight was on his chest. "OH NO!" he screamed in a female's voice. She ran to his house, the heels she now was wearing felt natural to run in as if she had worn them for years. Once home, she ran to her bedroom and was shocked by how different it looked. The room's walls were now pink and her bed had floral sheets. She then saw her dresser with a mirror on it. She walked up to it and looked into it. As she stared at her reflection, her mind slowly changed. Soon, her C- cup breasts felt as natural to her as her new equipment now did. She was wearing a Blue outfit. Her jeans were now a jean skirt, her top now showed her cleavage, and her her sneakers were 2 inch pumps. She admired her reflection & smiled. The next day she awoke & went straight to her closet & picked out a black dress & black heels. She then went to the kitchen, picked up her purse & went to the mall. Janet walked past the spells R Us store. The old man saw her go right by. "I guess she doesn't remember me." He said as he laughed. A few stores away Joseph, now Julie was walking past a lot of guys who were staring at her beautiful body & she smiled as she entered the store Spells R Us.